Eeny meeny miny moe…

I’M HALFWAY DONE WITH COLLEGE!!!

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Sorry.  I’m just really excited.  Especially since I finally finished moving back into my room and got it all organized how I like it.  During this one and a half day process (yes, it really did take me that long… I have way too much stuff) I came across some old high school stuff, and I found a poem I wrote ages and ages ago for one of my friends.  She had asked me to write a poem about something that has to do with nature, I think.  Or maybe it was supposed to be about one of the elements… I don’t remember exactly.  Either way, this is what I wrote:

Raindrop

Falling

Falling fast

Falling faster

Faster downward

Downward, downward,

And then I hit the ground

With a splash!

Well, I thought it needed a little tweaking.  So I came up with this:

Raindrop

falling!

Falling fast,

falling faster!

Faster downward,

downward, downward,

and then I hit the ground

with a splash!

But now I’m not sure about which one I like better.  I think that I might like the first because putting another exclamation point in the middle seems to throw off the momentum of the poem.  I feel like the “exclaimed” part should just be the splashing at the end.  But I also like capitalizing less letters.  Maybe I can combine the two options, like so:

Raindrop

falling

falling fast

falling faster

faster downward,

downward, downward,

and then I hit the ground

with a splash!

So.  Which do you prefer, and why?

Splashingly yours,

Torrence Nightingale

"Tut tut, it looks like rain..."

“Tut tut, it looks like rain…”

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